Thriving Fire

It's probably a pointless exercise to crit a poem that the poet doesn't like, but then again, I prefer pointless exercise to the proper, energetic kind :-) Everyone's complaining about ...

Here's the thing: using words like 'pain' and 'hurt' isn't a problem in poetry, absolutely it's not (at least in my opinion). The problem is, when you start clogging it ...

God I love this... For one thing, the atmosphere is almost tangible. I really get the sense of two people in love (or perhaps just friends?), spending their days merrily ...

Wow. That's the only word I can think of at the moment. Wow. Your mix of language, unusual and innovative, powered this poem along brilliantly. This is what poetry is ...

I'm gonna make one big, bold, statement about this: you need more depth . With poetry, we're generally told to read a poem twice before commenting, but the thing is, ...

OK, since I'm a firm believer in getting the bad out of the way first, here goes. The main problem with this is flow: it was all kinds of wrong. ...

For once in my rich and full life (that was sarcasm), I'm truly speechless. First of all, why are you in the young writer's society? Would you not be better ...

Hmm, 'tis an interesting idea, this. I don't think I've ever heard a song about theives and such, so that in itself is definately original. But you need more than ...

Oh, how I love good poetry.... First thing's first: it's mind-numbingly depressing, which is a good thing, because it's consistent. The mood of the poem is set out from the ...

This debate could go on forever but here's my take on it. First off, LOTR is very much an aquired taste. I know, because I've tried to read it a ...

Bloody hell, that was deep. Your use of images is incredible, dark and intriguing, if a bit depressing in parts. The rhyme scheme was a bit all over the place ...

I quite like this simply because it's uplifting but perhaps you could extend it a little bit? It just seems a bit short at the moment. Nonetheless it's simple and ...

Yeah, I like this... I get the sense of someone or something lonely, something alone in it's mysteriousness. 'Stumpy chimney, Marred with dark soot, But no smoke here cuts the ...

Not bad at all... The atmosphere is tense and dark, and the violence is suitably sickening. Your evil character is well written, a bit cliched perhaps, being a beautiful woman, ...

Unfortunately, I've only read the first version of this because frankly I couldn't be bothered reading something twice and trying to spot the differences. Sorry, I know it makes me ...